Pinky Violence // Part 1: Skin Memory
Added 2025-07-16 21:32:42 +0000 UTCHere we are: the rest of the first part of Pinky Violence.
This is the first draft of the opening 100 pages. It's subject to additions, revisions, corrections, etc.
Link: https://BookHip.com/ZSVLDCN
I'd like to hear your thoughts on this one. We can discuss it here.
Comments
Hmmm, Ian's going to think twice before he puts his precious "eggs" at risk with Saeko's teeth again. And she's been busy as well as opportunistic - Daniel and the Sensei?
Donkatsu
2025-07-24 02:56:59 +0000 UTCRead through the 3rd time, god where you can go from here. So far story can go many different ways. Pink Violence: the title grabbed me, I needed to see what it’s about
Chuck
2025-07-23 02:16:58 +0000 UTCThis reply has sparked a post of my own to respond to this great analysis. The title is important but appears nebulous. Its ambiguity is ripe and full and left for interpretation—and it does have meaning, too.
KT Morrison
2025-07-22 13:56:19 +0000 UTC"Are you so strong or is all the weakness in me." Joan Armatrading...
Bill F Protagoras
2025-07-19 19:02:20 +0000 UTC“We’d have to become pornographers." Another iron spike hammered into a simulated indoor boozers' cliff. The defiance of gravity real enough... A point of suspension. Bleak House... human habitation like the naked spread limbs of Da Vinci's exposed ratios. From behind a finely delineated craic.
Bill F Protagoras
2025-07-18 23:48:56 +0000 UTCI love the title, "Pinky Violence." I work in the field of instructional design, and a very important skill in that field is how to both capture and maintain "learner" attention. Three strategies for capturing attention are novelty, cognitive dissonance, and mystery; and I think this title does a great job in all 3 regards: 1. Novelty - The word "violence" is novel, surprising. It's also jarring, and maybe a little scary. 2. Cognitive Dissonance - Pinky Violence....How can a pinky be violent? It's the smallest, weakest finger. 3. Mystery - It's such an odd title that readers will wonder why, and may look to solve that mystery. Does someone die? What kind of "violence" occurs? Knowing your library, is "pinky" a nickname for a poorly endowed protagonist? Is this the story about his violence? Or is violence wrought by that little pinky dick itself? Maybe an infidelity? And that violence...Was it already performed, or yet to come? At any rate, great title! It captured my attention, and piqued my interest. That's for sure!
Pete
2025-07-18 21:50:37 +0000 UTC"She’d rendered him a panting slug." Artfully, craftily... unadorned venery unerringly dressed down in unprepossessing garb...
Bill F Protagoras
2025-07-18 17:27:16 +0000 UTCSkin presented cleverly as the truly carnal landscape it presents... smeared with a coital mess... fair in all its potential foulness.
Bill F Protagoras
2025-07-18 17:17:41 +0000 UTCFirst motif... Pinky Violence/ finger wrestling... 65 percent mmmmmmmmmmmn.
Bill F Protagoras
2025-07-18 17:03:32 +0000 UTC"A voyeur in his own marriage." Voyeurism maybe being an inevitable aspect of selfdom that is after all the trick to identity... if not the space time continuum. A seductive tether on reality. Fully triggered.
Bill F Protagoras
2025-07-18 16:23:16 +0000 UTCWow, a very interesting start, in this draft it felt jumpy. It bounced scene to scene. You have me hooked, I need to read more. The beginning has left me with a few ideas of what is going on. Definitely want to know more
Chuck
2025-07-18 02:36:56 +0000 UTC
