Re-editing Chapter 11
Added 2024-11-10 02:24:24 +0000 UTCI was working through the end of the dinner party and Tzila's forced confession and the scene wasn't sitting quite right with me, so I spent some time figuring out why. There's an element of Tzila's character that I've been working on softening, but I think I was doing it a little too much. I'm going back now and adding a little more of her resentment towards Jack, specifically, but I want to make sure I also contrast that with her getting along well with everyone else. It should make for a better and more satisfying twist when she reveals the actual source of her frustration, which then leads better into Cindy's proposal for how to resolve her conflict.
I'll upload new versions of chapters 11 and 12 probably tomorrow. Unfortunately I tripped and hurt my hand out grocery shopping, so typing is a little uncomfortable at the moment.
