Book 1: Complete

Summary if you don't wish to read the full post: Book 1 is finished! Doing a lot of edits. I will make them available and not expect you to have to pay a second time for the E-Book. You've all been loyal, even though I regularly post chaps a day late, and I wouldn't do that to you. Lots of changes will be listed below without a lot of detail for those who don't want to re-read from Chapter 1.


Thank you note: I also really want to thank you lads and lassies for joining us on this journey. You've been amazing, and this venture would be pointless without you. I like transparency, so I want the lot of you to know what you've done for us. There are three of us. We set what we should owe in taxes to the side and split the remainder three ways.

When I (Ullyr/L.C. Taylor) started this, I was behind on my mortgage, and you have no idea how much worry you've saved my family. We are expecting our fourth child (8 weeks along now), and if it weren't for your support, I know we would be struggling mentally with our decision since we wouldn't have been able to afford another child otherwise. For this, I think you from the bottom of my heart, and will continue to do my best to provide quality entertainment at a decent pace! This experience has solidified my decision to become a full time author. Had this not worked out, I would have been going back to work this week.

Alekzi, our group veteran and successful Webnovelist, wanted you to know how much he appreciates all of you. He has worked very hard to assist me in planning this novel and design our characters. Some of the mystery and behind the scenes work has helped him to improve on his plot creation and has given him ideas for another Webserial that is sure to be a hit. The extra income has allowed him to invest and provide his parents with a great Holiday season this year. This experience has provided him with an opportunity to reach beyond Webnovel. You have helped to fulfill his dream of reaching a much wider audience with a novel he can be proud of.

Entrail, our group schoolboy and also has a very successful Webnovel, is currently in his last year of university. He wanted to thank you for propping us up while we wrote this work and for your valuable feedback that helped us decide what needed to be done to really bring our story to life before sending Book 1 off to the Zon. He recently finished his internship for his final year. He was thinking of putting it off since during his attendance, he wouldn't be able to work on both this and his Webnovel (which is his main source of income), but you guys poured in here and provided him with the means not to push off doing another year. He's on track to graduating on time. This experience has improved his writing and helped him branch out as an author.

The actual post:

The final 2 Chapters of Book 1 are officially posted!

I hope that you all have enjoyed the adventure thus far, and I'm sorry if you feel this is a waste of an alert. For those of you who are upset about this alert, there will likely be 10 that appreciate it.Anyway, I will be going back to Chapter 1 and performing all of the edits from the beginning. I've discussed most of them in Discord, but I wanted to make it clear that some things will be different.

I WILL be replacing all of the current Chapters on both Patreon and Royal Road with the final versions once I'm done. There WILL be changes, if you would like to re-read to make sure there is no confusion later.

I will NOT be focusing on Grammar. These edits will primarily be continuity edits, adding in a few POVs, and making sure that some information is available earlier in the Book so as to cause less confusion. I won't be removing any lads, but I'll be replacing some of them with other words so that it isn't said so often. Expect a Whippersnapper or two to be tossed in there!  

Below is the list of edits that I'll be making. Some of them will be in the form of small edits throughout the existing lines, while others will be complete POV additions for a couple of characters. I only intend to spend today and tomorrow on this and don't plan to take any time off, but as of this moment, Friday's Patreon Chapter is tentative.

Whether it hits on Friday or Monday, the next Chapter on Patreon will be Chapter 1 of Book 2!

Priorites (in order):  

1: Update early Card info and the way they work to match current style  

2: Change ALL Rowan thought dialogues in first 18ish chapters to itallics to match the late book  

3: Add the way the Floors work in chapter two (make a flat out statement that once you go up, you can't go down, and that the Origin Floor is always accessible)  

4: Changes to the Origin Card in Chapter 1  

5: Unequip Memory Enhancement in Chapter 3 and give him a small headache (he doesn't need it because Origin Card perfect memory is still working, which he will have some thoughts on)  

6: Along with the above, using the Anazlyze Card on the Beasts needs to show the data floating in has vision, not on the Card (as it is in the later chapters. Cards should not be removed from Deck Box unless in a safe place using Essence to Level them)  

7: Show that Rowan is more relieved at getting a different Origin Card. (He should be more excited about his life not going the same route than receiving a Summoner Origin, no matter how amazing that is)

8: We NEED to add in Chapter 1 and a couple thoughts throughout that Rowan regrets never being able to have children, and that's why he is so sentimental toward them  

9: Tweak early Zachary scenes to match the later scenes. (I think his ACTIONS are fine, but we need him to think blandly, rather than just suddenly slapping readers with the explanation in the later chap)  

10: More variations to Lad (put in some young mans, boys, maybe a whippersnapper or two)  

11: Tweak Kass scene to make her more playful and less evil. (sadistic is fine, but need to better show that she was teasing Rowan in their first meeting. Possible POV additions)  

12: Tweak the Skull/Crook scene and make it more apparent that HE didn't want to hire the Skull, but his boss made him  

13: Add a bit of the teacher and Nat wondering about Rowan's strange speech (This is tough since it's 3rd POV and our other characters don't have thought dialogues)  

14: Alter any speech needed to keep it consistent  

15: Not sure how, but if possible, I would like to mke it more apparent that Rowan's speech isn't something THAT odd to people who don't know him. Yes, the folks who know him and others on the First Floor (since no longevity is actually gained until clearing the Floor) absolutely should find his tendancy to talk to others as if they are children strange, but it would NOT be something strange on the Origin Floor, where folks live to be hundreds of years old and still appear to be in their teens-30s (depending on what Floor they reached and how quickly they did so). Any babe/young stud you pass on the street can be centuries old. Need to make this clear.   

16: Not sure how I'll do this. Maybe a POV addition? I need to make it clear that the Floor reached DOES NOT equal strength. It only equals longevity. High Level Cards can be given by wealthy people/upper Floor Climbers to employees/followers who aren't even Climbers so that they can properly do their jobs, or protect their offspring/homes while they are away. I thought this was something folks would just get after spending some time on the Origin Floor (which is basically a mixing pot), but I suppose not.  

17: Let's just see how far I get with the rest. I think some of these would be cleared up simply by folks reading the novel as one whole piece, but I still wanna do my best to get everything in top shape.

Final Note: I'm sure I won't get to everything before I ship this off to our publisher, but please feel free to comment your thoughts on any of the above 16 points and provide ideas. Everything is prioritized, but I'll be sure to keep an eye out as I begin my read through from Chapter 1 this evening.

Again, sorry for not posting this along with the chaps so as to avoid another alert, but we wanted to sort through all of the edits we've noted down over the last month before sharing.