Home (Demo)
Added 2024-06-13 14:39:39 +0000 UTC
Wrote this for an upcoming video, lemme know your thoughts! It needs a lot more production, alex is on it. Inspiration was this reddit post of a guy getting his first apartment after being homeless for 16 years:
https://www.reddit.com/r/MadeMeSmile/comments/rt5ra5/after_16_years_of_homelessness_i_finally_have_my/?utm_term=1681564253&utm_medium=post_embed&utm_source=embed&utm_name=&utm_content=header
He wrote about having been a meth addict in California with deep depression and dark thoughts. I tried to turn it around to be something about appreciating the little things, as he is appreciating this first apartment.
Lyrics:
16 years under the sky
Now it's time to say goodbye
To the life that hurt him to the bone
And I realize the way
I take for granted every day
That in the end I can come back home
Never being grateful
If it isn't special
Feeling all this pressure
Friends are doing better
Feel like I am lesser
Give up on the pleasure
Until I catch up which might just be never
We're all told to be extraordinary
But most of us will be ordinary (and that's ok)
What's the point if I forget what happiness can feel like
Workaholic, I forget what's constituting real life
Wish I could snap out of it and do whatever feels right
I could probably be just fine
16 years under the sky
Now it's time to say goodbye
To the life that hurt him to the bone
And I realize the way
I take for granted every day
That in the end I can come back home
I feel like my heart's been broken
Since I was a little kid
Just stuck running through the motions
Don't feel like I ever lived
It looks like my time is over
Don't know how it got this way
My parents are getting older
And I've thrown my life away
16 years under the sky
Now it's time to say goodbye
To the life that hurt him to the bone
And I realize the way
I take for granted every day
That in the end I can come back home
You love 7/8!
RhodiumMaiden
2024-07-19 23:16:51 +0000 UTC
The vibe of the whole is on point. Your range has really come together for this and is really a smooth transition. Regret is hard to swing in the other direction. I get a sense of gratitude, realization, and understanding. Very nice to bring in with a little hope for future. The simple acoustic guitar accompaniment is a very nice touch. The mike you choose with a slight echo, is also a good choice. The hollowness of past with an uncertainty for the future. Really a wonderful overall attempt, but feel you hit the nail on the head. Thank you
Gayle
2024-06-18 15:59:49 +0000 UTC
I am a lyrics person and these lyrics combined with the soft campfire guitar really made me feel all the feelings. Exited to hear the final version of this one!
Lebuwi
2024-06-17 18:18:38 +0000 UTC
So much ear candy in a one song :) loved the vibe, takes me back to late 90's early 00's when boy bands did many slow ones with chord progressions like this. Took me back to my early youth. Your voice is so soothing here. It complements the song perfectly.
Pilamitar
2024-06-15 17:47:52 +0000 UTC
* Chill Home Noises * Great tune & lyrics, the individual behind the inspiration should be proud as to how far they've come. Relatability in most of these lyrics. Tack for sharing Mate πΊπΎ
PhantomFidget
2024-06-14 22:12:34 +0000 UTC
Good song, I likeπ
It takes me to the storytelling universe of "The ballad of Paul K" by McFly.
It bothers me a bit that 'extraordinary' rhymes with 'ordinary' tho. Could 'extraordinary' perhaps be 'legendary' or something similar, with a little bit of tweaking?
Sofie G
2024-06-14 16:30:36 +0000 UTC
Really enjoyed the softer side of your voice. β€οΈ this is gonna be stuck in my head all day at work now lol thank you for sharing, Joel this was really good π
Leah Miranda
2024-06-14 12:30:34 +0000 UTC
I like it, I always appreciate your voice more on calmer songs, it gives me time to take in how beautiful it sounds
Adina
2024-06-14 12:26:12 +0000 UTC
Oof same β€οΈ
Leah Miranda
2024-06-14 12:18:05 +0000 UTC
A bit of a different, softer, vibe in this one. I love it. β€οΈ Would definitely like to see this one out!
Dannielle O'Neill
2024-06-13 23:25:02 +0000 UTC
This definitely got me in my feelings!! I can relate, itβs hard not to compare yourself to others who you think are doing better, while still being grateful where you currently are in life. I feel like the music matches the lyrics perfectly. π
Miriam
2024-06-13 22:13:45 +0000 UTC
As most people said, I too love the cozy vibes of it. Can't wait for the finished mixed song, would love if you went either full melodine vochorder (don't come for my spelling please) style with super stacked lyrics in the chorus or totally leaned in to the country vibes the verse gives (at least to me π). Either way I'm sure y'all turn out an amazing song, it's already great in its 'raw' form πππ
Nataliekey
2024-06-13 21:35:06 +0000 UTC
Love those bands!!
Joel Berghult
2024-06-13 21:09:18 +0000 UTC
lol that might be my fav melody too
Joel Berghult
2024-06-13 21:04:35 +0000 UTC
Iβm listening again and realising that line at around 1.35 is tickling my brain in the most perfect way oh my god?? I canβt stop listening to it lolll
Rainbowz Grace
2024-06-13 20:30:41 +0000 UTC
Aubrey Danielle
2024-06-13 20:09:48 +0000 UTC
I get what you both mean. Doesnβt matter since Iβm gonna credit anyway. Ronan is a bit of a different case since thatβs about that story, this is just 3 lines in a long song. Still, wanna credit :) feels right
Joel Berghult
2024-06-13 19:40:17 +0000 UTC
Jesus Joel, not me crying at work. π³
Heather Lynn
2024-06-13 18:59:10 +0000 UTC
I completely understand what you mean! The lyrics and the story are raw, I kinda feel like the vocal should be too xx
Hayley
2024-06-13 18:53:49 +0000 UTC
π I'm not crying, you're crying π
Hayley
2024-06-13 18:52:25 +0000 UTC
Completely disagree. Joel shouldn't take credit for his story. Taylor Swift gave Maya Thompson for writing Ronan. That's messed up if Joel writes a song that is not his story and take credit for someone else misfortune.
Stephanie Bruso
2024-06-13 18:09:57 +0000 UTC
This is soo relatable and beautiful.. also explains that poem you shared.. and I love the slower swaying paceβ¦ 1.. critique that might be a just me thing or something that Alex is working onβ¦ I dunnoβ¦ the chorusβs backing vocalsβ¦
The effect on them sounds like it has a weird robotic/mechanical βenhancementβ to them or something π€β¦ it throws me off.. and seems to take away from the overall umph of the song
Does that make sense? Once again.. could just be a me thing π€·πΌββοΈ
Airyckah Lane
2024-06-13 17:51:10 +0000 UTC
Iβm not so sure this needs a direct credit.. people take inspiration from stories all the time. This is a vague reference that could apply to many people
Airyckah Lane
2024-06-13 17:45:06 +0000 UTC
So beautiful and cozy. Definitely heart-warming. The lyrics are so genuine and hit you right in the feels.
Courtney Walker
2024-06-13 17:21:37 +0000 UTC
will def credit! The only part that's his story is the first 3 lines in the chorus, but yeah agree with you! Would wanna give him a % of any revenue
Joel Berghult
2024-06-13 16:47:13 +0000 UTC
You should make sure you give him a writing credit since it's his story
Stephanie Bruso
2024-06-13 16:26:56 +0000 UTC
The writing is heartbreaking and therapeutic at the same time.. beautiful π’ The whole song is gorgeous, I legit cried. The pressure of time is very relatable (to choose or even know what's most important and be fully there), but it's also so hard to be fully happy in a world where everyone (so many) doesn't get to be happy or, as in the song, doesn't get their needs met. The small joys I appreciate and love the most β€οΈ
Nina L
2024-06-13 16:21:08 +0000 UTC
Beautiful π
Brandt
2024-06-13 16:19:49 +0000 UTC
I really enjoy hearing the emotion in your voice and meaning of the song. Like how it's okay to just be a normal person and not to overwork yourself. Also, about how parents are getting older, a reminder to spend time with them while we can. Knowing what you value in life and the importance how someone spends their time. I'm already picturing a music video for this song in my mind! Thank you for sharing this with us Joelπ₯°
Naomiskyyy
2024-06-13 16:18:02 +0000 UTC
Anyone else find it oddly relaxing? I feel so peaceful now, the song is so nice π
Rainbowz Grace
2024-06-13 16:12:35 +0000 UTC
Really lovely and very, very true. Well done π
Becky Lorion
2024-06-13 15:50:01 +0000 UTC
I truly appreciate the fact, that your lyrics are always about something that matters - not the pile of random and boring wordsβ¦ Plus your melodies and delivery are always on point and PERFECT π€
Franceska
2024-06-13 15:44:14 +0000 UTC
Ooh. This one tickled my heart. This song definitely honored the story. Well done.
TheNeediestOne
2024-06-13 15:42:13 +0000 UTC
It's beautiful π’
Genevieve
2024-06-13 15:37:53 +0000 UTC
Love the acoustic version of this song!! Such emotional lyricsπ₯ Hope you have a great week!!
Bookdragon 43
2024-06-13 15:24:36 +0000 UTC
Seeing parents getting older is so relatable.. no note on the demo from me really, just curious of how you would put together a video around this song :)
Bua (mintteafortwo)
2024-06-13 15:10:50 +0000 UTC
I took time to read the reddit post, comments and lyrics before listening. Just through reading warms my heart. Listening to your voice and the song made me even more warm and fuzzy. It's been a while since I heard any guitar acoustic song from you. I could feel your earnest feelings through your own reflections and how you're trying to be contented with life. I really like this gentle melody. Just waiting for the polished version to add to my loop playlist! Thanks for this beautiful song~~π
β οΈ Aslyn Jobry β οΈ
2024-06-13 15:06:49 +0000 UTC
Why are you doing this to me, Joel? (smearing my snots over my face)
N M
2024-06-13 15:04:20 +0000 UTC
Hope that you someday remember that work isnβt everything in life. Thereβs so many good things people miss in life because of work β€οΈ
Marlene Sommer βοΈ
2024-06-13 15:01:45 +0000 UTC
I like the melody, I started to sway as I got to the first chorus.
Kinga Konyecsik
2024-06-13 14:59:24 +0000 UTC
I can relate too hard with the lyrics, so here I am with some crap in my eyes π₯Ήπ₯² I liked the way u can hear the guitar and the emotional vocals were beautiful πΆπ₯°
Thanks for this one, can't wait to hear the finished version of it πβ€οΈ
JustSomeJK
2024-06-13 14:57:47 +0000 UTC
I hate that sometimes you need to see someone else in a bad place to realize how good you have it.
Lianne Conroy
2024-06-13 14:57:03 +0000 UTC
First impression: Lovely lyrics that can be interpreted a number of ways. A cosy emotional feel. Nice to hear a song from you that isn't about heartbreak.
Cas
2024-06-13 14:51:16 +0000 UTC
Ooof. That got me all emotional, Joel. It's beautifully written. π₯Ήπ₯°
Trisa
2024-06-13 14:50:26 +0000 UTC
I just love it. π
You're so creative.
I liked seeing you composing about someone elseβs life.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
There is nothing more beautiful than overcoming our traumas.
Have a great week :)
Jess Haggstron
2024-06-13 14:48:16 +0000 UTC
That's hit a nerve with me - I've got to my 40s and life isn't what I expected or wanted but at least I have a place to call home, food to eat and family to love.
It's very much about valuing what you have not what you could have.
You could switch the verses around and have the bit about being younger first then transition into as your older then the realization that none of it really mattered because you always have a place to call home.
Clair (Teampanda)
2024-06-13 14:47:04 +0000 UTC
Ahh this is beautiful! May have gotten a little teary-eyed.
Alle Engdahl
2024-06-13 14:46:31 +0000 UTC