Chapter 85: Critical Mass

I actually already fixed that by now. :) It says fiancée now.

Domagoj Kurmaic

Loved this chapter it was alot of fun Not sure if this is an error or not but towards the end it says Daimen's team was there as was his wife Orissa Isn't Orissa his fiance not wife.

Dark Prophet

In regards tot he first question, I'm afraid you'll have to read the story to find out. :) And they might be close, but it's a huge thing to allow someone to free access to your deepest thoughts and memories. Fictionpress does not have comments directly beneath chapters, but it does have them, in the form of 'reviews'. Go to the top of the chapter page. Right beneath the summary of the story is a bunch of traits like 'Rated', 'Chapters', 'Words'... and 'Reviews'. After reviews is a number (4317 at the moment) which is blue and underlines. Clicking on it leads you tot he review page where you can leave a comment and read the ones other people left.

Domagoj Kurmaic

I have two questions. Will Zack ever let Zorian use his mind magic to figure whats wrong with him?. With how close they are now, I though he would have done it long time ago as it could reveal some important information for them. Second, why don't I see any comments under the chapters in fictionpress? with how good the story is, I am sure some people would have left comments.

A little late but I just reread the chapter and had to make a comment. Definitely one of my best chapter. I loved how Zorian found his ideal teacher, Storm Dream thinking her big revelation as stupid idea and the lich fight of course. When I first read the chapter and went to sleep, I dreamed about how they broke the news to them and everyone reaction in the next restart.

Thanks for the chapter! For typos: - "Something nonsense about (...)" was probably supposed to be "Some nonsense about (...)". - "Zorian was pretty sure that she (he was pretty sure it was a female lizardman) (...)" has a double use of "was pretty sure" which might not be intentional

Adrien Matricon

Great chapter! Things are really heating up now.

Mihai Popescu

Thanks. Added to the editing list. It's getting so long...

Domagoj Kurmaic

No, nothing like that. Although I have nothing against dwarves and elves, and even like the idea, I felt their presence would only detract from the setting/story in this case. If I added something like that, I wouldn't want to make them irrelevant, and this world has enough things going on that I don't need additional complications like that.

Domagoj Kurmaic

That type of pocket dimension does not have the weight problem, so yes.

Domagoj Kurmaic

Thanks again! Parts with typos: - would get a significantly easier - Phase spiders, for instance, would capable of - use it to command a some - figuring out how the crown.

NonuvfOorbiz

Was just wondering; do anything like dwarves or elves exist in the MOL universe? If they do/did what's the backstory? Any bad-ass world building on some super-civilization that is never really even alluded to in the story? Was curious as the story is based pretty heavily on D&D. (I think I read somewhere the old Bakora civilization was going to remain a mystery, so it'd have to be based elsewhere plot-wise?)

Matthew M

Does the bracelet mean ZZ figured out the weight problem with pocket dimensions?

Prince Hakeem

That was brilliant. I love the bartering scenes with the Lich so much! Found this: "Quatach-Ichl was momentarily frozen in place, a look [of] surprise on his face."

HOLY CRAP! Deeply satisfying!

JDG

You sir, are the best. Thanks for the excellent chapter

Daniel I Beer

That was pretty satisfying.

Matthew M

Thanks for the Chapter!