Life of a Dominant Futanari Week 8 Chapter 334/ 20: No Headshots
Added 2024-12-19 11:44:52 +0000 UTCHey guys,
I know i have been saying this a lot lately but I would love feed back on this. I have been tired and to me chapters just feel so weird to me. I have reread them and i feel like i got everything right but at the same time my brain is telling me I have it all wrong. So because of my Imposter Syndrome I would love to hear what you all think. (I am being serious.)
Thanks, Enjoy the Chapter.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tOfYeHBVJWL8HENfAibE86lwt4ORzfboZammRy0si5I/edit?usp=sharing
Comments
Good chapter.
Justin "Johnist" Johanson
2024-12-19 19:26:08 +0000 UTCSensei is definitely my favorite supporting character
Ritsu 229
2024-12-19 16:02:00 +0000 UTCIt was a good, well written chapter. But i feel it was a carbon copy of the previous fight and you should make Trevor take the hint he isn’t gonna sway her to the mma in college and stop bringing the fighters into fight her, but now have him do everything that he can that can get scouted with volleyball and running
jdhawks94
2024-12-19 15:11:53 +0000 UTCYeah i know that he tries to get her into mma but she is so against it. But i must say MMA fits her more than volley because she doesnt seem like a good teamplayer. But she invested so much into it already. Maybe i see it to much from my perspectiv, im very pragmatic (i think that is the word for it) that dont like to do bigger/riskier things that gives me no value or goes against my goal.
SirCoffee
2024-12-19 13:58:07 +0000 UTCHmmm, I can see where you get the carbon copy from although that was not what I was aiming for. As for improvement on her fighting, Trevor is trying to get her to go into MMA in University. So I cant say more than that.
Madjic
2024-12-19 13:33:12 +0000 UTCDidnt like that chapter at all. The guy was a carbon copy of the figther before. (for me these ohh you bitch alpha types getting on my nerves, he is nr what in this story?) I never did professionel sport in my life but i dont see the benefits of making a fighting video of her improvement for a volleyball/running carrier path and taking the risk. And i dont unterstand what she need to explain to her sensai in this fight. The positiv is its very good writen and the gramatical errors or half sentences are not here like in the chapters before.
SirCoffee
2024-12-19 13:25:37 +0000 UTCThat was heart racing, Loved it!
Curtis1122
2024-12-19 12:05:49 +0000 UTC
