I Sissified my Step Bro Book 3 Chapter 1
Added 2025-03-28 09:34:21 +0000 UTCHey Guys,
My laptop is enjoying making me more and more insane.
Anyways, Here is a Chapter that I would LOVE feedback on. I am looking for what people think and I hope you all enjoy!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wCfbbaKI4qIBVyL6MI65ZIjyOYIuj7zqfFwFB8m8oOs/edit?usp=sharing
Comments
This is going to be good. Just want to read more!
Shamim
2025-03-30 11:26:07 +0000 UTCThat upper part i know because hardcore anal sex can be very messy, never knew that there is a longtime diet for that. Learned something new today. No problem, benefits everyone when its fixed. Yeah had the same with german, Im mosly german (half polish) got always 4-6 in german but somehow in 6th or 7th grade something clicked but still not a big fan of all the rules. Dont know how editing (and ai) works with grammar there are so many fucking rules that for me makes no sense.
SirCoffee
2025-03-28 16:17:34 +0000 UTCI did add a bit more context, though, and thanks for the fixes. I wish my editing software were better, or you know, I wish I were better at grammar. However, English (even though I am an English speaker) was my weakest subject in school. My grammar has definitely improved, but the editing software does a great deal to help me. I have gotten the fixes it needs to do from 500 to like 200, but that is still a lot more to go lol.
Madjic
2025-03-28 11:09:18 +0000 UTCSo, The diet thing is because if you look into Anal porn and how people set up for it. A woman in the scene, or the Trans woman, or whoever is receiving usually doesn't eat and does a bit of a liquid diet, so there isn't anything coming out the back end when you play. I don't make it a thing in my books, really, because, um, moderation. Also that is not a genre I'm a fan of at all. I also plan to be a bit more fleshed out later what the diet thing is about.
Madjic
2025-03-28 11:02:57 +0000 UTCIt is a very good read. Loved the beginning as someone with hyperspermia i love a good girl that likes cum like riley. Like the contrast between the scenes with riley and the other girl. Only bad thing is the grammatik is worse then your other work and for me the diet thing was weird and didnt understand that.
SirCoffee
2025-03-28 10:40:27 +0000 UTC
