Futanari System Chapter 321: Sending Away
Added 2025-10-10 09:11:02 +0000 UTCHey everyone,
I hope you all enjoy the chapter. I would love to hear your feedback. Honestly, I am just feeling weird about all my writing at this moment. So I would love the feedback so I can center myself on if it is bad or not.
Thanks, I do hope you all enjoy.
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Comments
I love how you are doing this. But the war arc has definitely dragged out as my positive criticism. Time for the kingdom building and back to some adventures. Adventures for diplomatic reasons of course 😏. Chelsea cares too much for all her children regardless of the situation of the moms to leave their care with potential enemies. Her children born from the princess and duchess are going to be kept an eye on by her. Also. Mommy rabbit has been itching for some "real baby" making time with Chelsea 👌. Along with us learning what her harem has accomplished during their battles in this war. Chelsea was mainly focused on the big hitter characters this past war. Her political marriages to the women who are now addicted to Doorknocker also need to start. Dragon princess as one example. Dealing with Political parties are still necessary at this point. Her new sex slaves also need some loving as well. From the women to the Femboys. Her dream about the whole mpreg thing can be worked on as well. With the elf femboy husband as a "worthy" start with Chelsea putting a baby in him. Showing Chelsea and the elf wife "loving him" as a result of him having Chelsea's baby inside would make for some interesting character development of him as a "Twink Mommy" 😏👌. Especially if Chelsea was watching the elf husband making love to the one couple we saw in the important side chapters. Maybe he gives birth to twins, one from Chelsea, and one from the guy who is now an "essential background character" because of the side chapter.
Kaiju TSlaymer
2025-10-11 02:44:05 +0000 UTCTftc. It was well paced and had a good mix of scene progression and detail. Personally I would love to see more character interaction, there's a lot of characters that came to the war but have barely any scene time. It feels like a time skip could work once the mana message meeting is done, but if it kicks of the next stage of the war it would work well too.
Jesterr90
2025-10-10 23:44:41 +0000 UTC
