NWD #5
Added 2023-07-11 21:51:27 +0000 UTCAn Encroaching Mist
Going back to my normal rotation, so MHA is next!
Comments
Giving constructive criticism isn’t asking him to “conform” it’s something that could genuinely improve the formatting of his writing.
thevolunteer
2023-07-13 22:05:15 +0000 UTCIt's all on questionable questing with the rest of his company fics. This one is at https://forum.questionablequesting.com/threads/naruto-waifu-den-commissioned.22459/
Alex Collyer
2023-07-13 22:00:15 +0000 UTCWhere are the first 4 chapters? Someone got a link?
Mark
2023-07-13 17:19:18 +0000 UTCKakashi will get better with time and therapy... lots of therapy. He got most of his development in Shippuden so it makes sense hes a complete dickhead rn
NOPE YOU DON'T KNOW MY NAME
2023-07-12 18:41:16 +0000 UTCWorst case scenario, its a word doc. Control + A hit italics twice, and it should reset to everything being not formatted. Don't ask Lee to conform to you, just conform his works to your tastes.
NOPE YOU DON'T KNOW MY NAME
2023-07-12 18:39:58 +0000 UTCWow, really made me hate this version of Kakashi
Tyric Gaias
2023-07-12 13:32:02 +0000 UTCOne thing I enjoy about the chapter is with li reactions that anko is gonna have to put bits into a psych eval for the hokage so they can see what makes him tic and him going off on the whole thing about tazuna souls and the many names he called him. Its gonna paint a picture of someone who takes deals and the job seriously, hates bad teachers already and cares more for the people he considers friends then the attitude of a superior with a ego. It all paints a picture for them and I wanna hear their thousands words of interpreting it is. edit: I wanna say I did chuckle when li was poking holes in kakashi's many sayings he presents as something everybody knows to his team.
JohnJohn2195
2023-07-12 10:05:53 +0000 UTCI've read his stories a bunch on it never bothered me but i do see it brought up a bunch as complaints. Someone on qq had a solution that was pretty good. Since he post the chapters they would copy it, put it in word or whatever notes if they were on mobile, select all then turn the italics off.
JohnJohn2195
2023-07-12 07:45:13 +0000 UTCThat Monk just swallowed the Kyuubi’s energy and survived. He's a lot stronger than he appears isn't he?
Silent_Ninja10
2023-07-12 04:31:02 +0000 UTCMight be a while. I think this is the last commissioned chapter and its over $200 till the next one is
Alex Collyer
2023-07-12 01:44:17 +0000 UTCI loved the introduction of the Mist Monk especially the way Haku thought of themselves in non-binary terms. The scene with the sherrigan at the very end brought up some questions that I hope to see answered in future chapters. I wish I could donate this month to see another chapter but I'm still strapped for the foreseeable future.
Steven Stiring
2023-07-12 01:42:09 +0000 UTCAgreed, I really like your writing and stories, but the italics are a MASSIVE headache. I basically have to read any chapter you post in parts, because I get so fed up with it, so quickly.
Cameron Burchett
2023-07-12 01:27:48 +0000 UTCThe growing world to fit in monks and similar is looking so good. Those unforeseen calibration effects to make it all fit are gold. On the one hand, more Haku's is going to up the danger all the more together with the new arrival, on the other, it sounds like they're valid stamp targets and already predisposed to service in their worldview sooo high risk high reward? The inter-team relations, or lack of, is going to have big ripples if they don't all grow up quick, and that stinger at the end makes me dread the wait for the next chapter.
Prospero
2023-07-12 00:48:04 +0000 UTCThat's the color hexcode so, when I post it, it's right there.
PublicLee Speaking
2023-07-11 23:23:55 +0000 UTCThis is just a personal preference, but you might want to tone down the amount of italics. It feels like every sentence has something emphasized.
thevolunteer
2023-07-11 22:27:34 +0000 UTCThink something posted wrong when Hakus cousin spoke. the woman regarded the living tool, and smiled. “Hello, Cousin.” #368BC1
Solopath
2023-07-11 22:26:15 +0000 UTCGood chapter. Hope Hiruzen listens to Kakashi bitching about Li and goes, “I’m sorry, did he say anything incorrect?”
thevolunteer
2023-07-11 22:16:57 +0000 UTC
